Whenever the narrative Point of View is first person, the story is, by definition, about the narrator. In this case, as in any writing, your goal is to draw the reader in. Therefore, if you choose to use “I” as the narrator, you need to present a quest that many readers would care about. That is true even when writing memoir. And to that end, in all cases, use the “I” pronoun as sparingly as possible. The more you use “I” the more personal to the writer/speaker the narrative feels. When you do use “I” try not to begin most sentences with I, I, I. Change-up and vary.

Because of technical difficulties associated with an HD conversion at the station, my interview will be rescheduled at a later date. I’ll keep you posted.

Be selective–and restrained–in using exclamation points and italics. More than one of these every few pages probably means you are using these visual markers to shore up weak word choices. Journal editors, agents, and publishers will immediately tag you as an amateur.

You might, rarely, create a character for whom exclamation points or the verbal stresses represented by italics is part of her (or his) voice. Even in this case, take care not to overdo it. And be particularly stingy in using these markers elsewhere in the manuscript.

At 2:00 on Thursday, April 22, I am giving a reading at The Virginian, 300 Twinridge Ln, Richmond, VA. This event is free and open to the public. I will be reading selections from my short fiction, with commentary on writing. The event is scheduled for one hour, and I will be signing copies of Dark Harbor after.

Two women decide to get permanent make-up–i.e., they will get their eyeliner and eyebrows tattooed on. One is 79, the other 65.

Write the story. It might revolve around their motivations. Possibly jealousy or competition develop. Maybe something goes horribly wrong. Or maybe something totally different. Think morality tale–or magical realism. Go!

Wednesday, April 21, I will appear on Virginia This Morning. The program airs from 9:00 to 10:00 on WTVR, the CBS affiliate in Richmond. I’ll be talking about writing Dark Harbor.

Dredge up your earliest memories. Choose one that you are sure is your memory, not a second-hand one that you’ve heard about all your life from family members. Examine the memory and try to understand what made it memorable. What was/is its emotional importance. Use that emotional importance as the theme for a story–memoir, fiction, or memoir based fiction.

Think about something you do that you don’t want anyone else to see/know you do. I don’t mean anything illegal, or even immoral. I mean something that’s simply “not done”–even if nearly everyone does it. For example, research tells us that nearly all people pick their noses, and that an astonishing majority of people (at least sometimes) smell their fingers after wiping their behinds. Choose one of these uncomfortable behaviors and then write  a story–or at least a scene–in which your character performs the behavior and then discovers that s/he has been observed.

A touch of dialect helps establish voice, and may lend authenticity to the writing. But for the beginning writer, knowing how much is enough is often difficult.

A story studded with apostrophes and phonetically spelled words draws attention to the writing, detracting from the story. Two of the most frequent verbal habits are saying an’ for and and dropping the final g from words ending in -ing. These words occur so frequently that the printed page sprinkled with apostrophes looks odd. Not putting in the apostrophes for dropped letters–for example, simply writing an instead of an’ for and–may actually be confusing.

A better approach is to look for a few places where phonetically spelling dialect makes a difference and drop out all of the others. For example, the difference between boo-kay and bouquet is so subtle that it probably isn’t worth making the reader pause and notice. Instead, rely on vocabulary and grammar to establish voice.

To avoid wimpy writing, attend to the details. I already talked about avoiding weasel words like some, few, or many in favor of specific numbers or quantities. The same applies to vague nouns: flower, tree, shrub, car. Tell the reader it’s a rose, an elm, an English boxwood, a Ford. Consider how to make chair, house, dog, cat, etc. clearer for the reader. In choosing your specifics, choose your details to further plot, character, tone. Build power one detail at a time.